BlazingOx2089
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Join date : 2012-08-06
 |  Subject: INACTIVE - Ace B. Daniel  Mon Aug 06, 2012 8:55 am | |
| [You must be registered and logged in to see this image.]Name: Ace B. Daniel Age: 14 Gender: Male Hometown: Celadon City, Kanto. Aim In Life: To challenge every Elite 4 in each region. POKEMON[You must be registered and logged in to see this image.]Name: Patchy Gender: Male Ability: Immunity Nature: Naughty Characteristic: Quick Tempered Distinctive Features: Wears an eye-patch on his right eye, lost eye to a fight. [You must be registered and logged in to see this image.]Name: Zeus Gender: Male Ability: Static Nature: Lonely Characteristic: Alert To Sounds Distinctive Features: Loves to wear blue sun glasses. [You must be registered and logged in to see this image.]Name: Jenny Gender: Female Ability: Flame Body Nature: Adamant Characteristic: Loves To Eat Distinctive Features: Is faster and has sharper teeth than most Growlithe.
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Lady N
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Age : 31
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| | Subject: Re: INACTIVE - Ace B. Daniel Mon Aug 06, 2012 9:37 am | |
| Very nice, but there are some changes needed. Nothing terrible though, just some details  1. Your last name is different in the title and the description  2. "Highly dangerous" and "Really shy" aren't Characteristics. You might want to check [You must be registered and logged in to see this link.]. Other than that, it's really promising | |
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LordFungus
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Age : 28
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| | Subject: Re: INACTIVE - Ace B. Daniel Mon Aug 06, 2012 9:42 am | |
| I agree with Neuro... other than that Welcome to the team! | |
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BlazingOx2089
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Join date : 2012-08-06
| | Subject: RE: Ace B. Daniel Mon Aug 06, 2012 9:47 am | |
| Ok I have fixed all the errors hope its okay now  | |
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Lady N
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| | Subject: Re: INACTIVE - Ace B. Daniel Mon Aug 06, 2012 9:57 am | |
| Yup, everything's cool I'm locking the topic and put the finishing touch on your post. As soon as you see the pictures, you may post | |
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